A Person Who Has Great Influence In My Life A strong and brave man. He has a pair of small and black dark eyes. He has a pumpkin shaped face. Not a very tall but average height he has. His lips are thick. And you will see two rows of yellowish teeth with streaks of white. He is my dearest father. His actual age is fifty plus, but you can't realize it if you just look through his face. Keep smiling and be happy are the secret ways he looks more younger than his age. My father was born in a small fishing village near Sabak Bernam. He worked as a fisherman for more than five years since he was thirteen years old. According to my grandma who had passed away, my father worked at a young age because they were too poor to send my father for education. Later he married my mother. They shifted to Kuala Lumpur. My father worked in a fishball factory for the first few years in Kuala Lumpur. He told me he moved to Selayang in 1986. There was the place he began hiscareer as a boss of a fishball factory. After working hard and putting a lot of effort in the factory for about 19 years, it is today, this man has succeeded. Although he was born in a kampung, although he did not have high education, but his hard work, his confidence has brought him to success. Success has not gone to his head he gives work to those young men or old ladies in his hometown. My father continues to contribute to his hometown. He repaired the only Chinese temple in his hometown. His generousity has made me proud of him. Papa is not afraid to become a looser. He always updates himself through reading the newspaper. Me and my siblings will teach him Malay and English words when he needs our help. He changed my perspective towards life. "Not to be afraid and face the problem whenever we meet them", he taught me. His hard workingness, generous, and always willing to learn attitude have influenced me so much. He is my teacher, my hero and of course, a father that made me proud of him.
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A strong and brave man, he has a pair of small, black, dark eyes. He has a pumpkin shaped face and an average height. His lips are thick, showing just two rows of yellowish teeth with streaks of white. He is my dearest father. His appearance contradicts his age, which is more than fifty years old. By smiling and staying happy, he looks younger. I'm not going to help you correct the whole essay but here are some tips: -be concise -don't use "you" -read over it once OUTLOUD to check any spelling (i think you meant loser instead of looser) or grammar mistakes -make sure there are no sentence fragments (like the 1st sentence) or run-ons -have sentence variation -don't use "he" so often; change it up (this hero, etc) -remember to have parallel structure (2nd to last sentence: His efforts, generosity, and devotion to learning influenced...)
